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Tuesday, 16 February 2016

POPCORN

Popcorn 10/2/16
On Wednesday my class made popcorn. I heard the popcorn sizzling and forming in the machine and I smelt smoke like a breaking down hair dryer, it looked like the popcorn was trying to escape from jail. It was  exploding out of the volcano it was going everywhere. I see yellow clouds all over the floor, suddenly it stopped and Vanessa put some more nuts in the popcorn machine it started again. In my mind the popcorn is screaming in a triumpth voice “I can't believe I can fly”. Vanessa was taking bowls around the room the bowls were just full, I grabbed a handful and I shove it in my mouth. It is crunchy and as I finish the popcorn I noticed that it’s stuck in my the teeth.

6 comments:

  1. I really love how you have used all the senses to describe this experience Sean. You have used each sense wonderfully and I can picture exactly what is happening in my head. I also especially love the part where it is saying "I believe I can fly"! Well done. Miss D :)

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  2. Sean - you have really thought hard about how you could take our experience of making popcorn and write about it, trying hard to create images in your readers heads. I enjoyed the phrase you used - "it looked like the popcorn was trying to escape from jail". Kiri

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  3. Yum
    I could almost smell it cooking
    It made me want to go to the movies
    Mum

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  4. I like this sentence because it's like you went into the popcorn so mind- In my mind the popcorn is screaming in a triumph voice.

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